We met at the local bar and had a drink or two.
She was doing shooters and I was drinking brew.
I couldn’t help but notice, she wore a low cut blouse,
so I invited her to come back to my house.
I pulled her close to me and looked deeply in her eyes.
She threw up on my shoulder, much to my surprise.
She broke wind so forcefully, I think she cracked the door.
Then her eyes rolled upward and she passed out on the floor.
I picked her up, took her out, and laid her on the lawn.
I hope she won’t remember and in the morning will be gone.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: (provided by sponsor)
10 lines only
A contest entry
- !!!!!QUICKIE!!!!!!! by cre8tiv-writer.
1000 points, ended October 13, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
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this one struck me really funny.. I thought that one got more than they bargained for on this one.. don't you think??
interesting take on the prompt.
I really loved it..
kat
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You're terrible!
LOL
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LOL!!! This was rude and hilarious!!!! I hope this didn't really happen to you before!!!
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heehee
I loved the rhyme in this. -
LOL - fun yuck... that's what men get when they pick up bimbos. And how sad to think of what a lonely, mixed up young woman this is. Great job.
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You took a lighter side to this love, and did it beautifully.
Riftkin
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LOL!!!! This was very funny. I got a kick out of this one. Good Luck in the contest
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