she is worn
by the rivers of experience
tossed on rocks of determination
churned from the depths
by the undercurrent
her every thought
a grain of sand
that will, with time,
become a castle
A contest entry
- Short Poems Of Nature by misticmoonlite.
475 points, ended October 21, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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what a lovely piece
you penned this with very nice images, the heart of the land is divided by water, nicely formed...
thank you for this entry, good luck
Linda
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a castle from a grain of sand, remarkable brevity here and the wonderful open words...deliver a strong idea on the strength of possibilities and faith...wonderful...PK
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