I sit here watching you cry
Your heart is broken
I can't imagine what you are going through
But you don't know what I feel
I know what I feel is true
I love you
And always have
Always will
You say to me
Will never love another
I hope you will break this promise
Because it breaks my heart
Is it wrong
That I am happy
She has left you
Maybe I think you will fall for me
You don't notice
How much you mean to me
We belong together
Like a blind man,
You don't see
What is right in front of you
Me
I love you...
Author notes
Option 2: And if the best is for the best then the best is unkind
Best for the Best - Josh Ritter
I kinda think I did this correctly...
A contest entry
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Comments
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That is a tough situation to be in, you captured the emotions well. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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Tell him. I know what it's like to be sitting, waiting and wishing that another would just realise that they are all you want. This poem was great and I hope things work out. Thanks for entering the contest!
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I'm not really good at constructive criticism, because I'm not an expert in any way shape or form, but you might tweek the third stanza just a little, other wise I think it works just fine.
In answer to your internal question NO it isn't wrong for you to be happy they broke up, just make sure he's ready to move on from her or it may not turn out as you wish.
Any thank you for entering.
Cheryl
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AW, SO SWEET!!!!
I believe all of us have been in this very same situation, loving someone who loves another, always there for them through thick and thin hoping one day they will love us like we love them.
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