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A harpy's love


seated on that
bitter
couch of native imprints
she crowed;


"run away just
like you always
do!"


though I knew she really
meant stay


I left anyways.











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... 27 words.

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    So sadly true...why do men do just what they know we do not want them to...is that a get even thing???
    Nicely written...
    thank you for entering!
    mystic


  • emc2
    October 11, 2008
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    Good poem. I really like it. Typical man! Good Luck in the contest!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    typical man! Arg...
    Great piece though really hit home


    Delila