Scream a scream loud as can be
Scream a scream its so mean
Scream a scream and let it ring
Scream a scream angry as can be
Screaming a Scream
A contest entry
- Open to you! 20 to 30 words of whatever you wish by mysticstorm.
300 points, ended October 11, 2008, 11 entries
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Depression, Aggresion, Aggitation
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i actually went outside last week and did that to release frustration more than anger... haha... i got a few weird looks, but hey.. i felt better.
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if you felt better then thats all that counts Right
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scream a scream and let it out
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lol ok i will
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Hmmm... While repetition can be effective at times, it only served to weaken your poem. The sentiment is there, but you need to work on your descriptions. Poetic devices are your friends, and it would only benefit you to use them.
You are on the right track with the free-verse, though. I'll be by to read more of your poems soon.
Best wishes,
Laura, aka Immortal
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ok
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but don't scream in my ear! lol.
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okay i wont choco i promise
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I always do that in the shower...keeps everyone else calm...sometimes we just need a break...well written in raw emotions...
thank you for entering!
mystic -
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hehe
thanks so much and i understand i do it also
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