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Boxing Clever.

Shaded, or in full light,
half hidden behind
the backdrop of black
or white~

 

Portrait perfection,
draped by beauty,
adorned with gossamer
translucency~

 

 

Landscape, enriched
with rolling hills
and clover hues,
dusted by sunlight~

 

Childish antics,
captured by a moment,
cherished forever,
a smiling face~

 

 

Innocence radiates
the lens, often clouded
by simplistic error,
tarnished~

 

 

Snapped,
captured,
mounted,
admired~

 

 

Digital nonsense,
takes on the wonder
of the canvassed
boxed brownie.

~~~

 

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  • Super-man
    October 15, 2008
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    Fantastic.

    As a photographer, this is so real.  The splendour must be experienced.

    Awesome piece.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    October 14, 2008

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    Hi and Welcome!

    I love the imagery and subtle alliteration to this piece.

    Where I get hung up is in the technicalities. Are you speaking of the earliest large format cameras that require the "black curtain" of sorts which the photographer would drape over himself? If so, there would not be "shades of clover" or "Childish antics,
    captured by a moment," because the color was monochrome and the exposures took about 2 minutes, I believe. The subject had to remain perfectly still, their head often supported. (I viewed a recent exhibit about this technique.)

    I think if you want to keep the theme, you should explore each technology more, perhaps even do some research on it. One requires one kind of discipline and precision, the other can be enhanced by computer technology. I think this is a worthy subject.

    As it is, I think it's a little disjointed.

    Scores will be posted at the end of the contest.

    • cutiepie gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you for your comments No, I was talking more of the portrait scenario of post victorian times. You make an interesting point...I had forgotten about the dangerous art of photography when the flash could end up burning all the people involved .Many thanks for your comments, as always, very much appreciated


  • trista gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Hi and welcome to the POW!

    Reading this makes me think about just how far photography has come just in MY lifetime...if I look back to the black and white baby pictures of my parents, it's even more remarkable. I think you've picked a good theme to work with and a lovely poetic tone. There are so many different ways you could take this write, in an effort to "flesh it out" as has already been mentioned. Your words seemed to melt together better in my mind than when I read aloud...there's just a hit of alliteration and assonance; I'd love to see you work a wee bit more into the poem as well...but as always, this is only MO.

    I honestly didn't have a clue what the poem was about based on the title, so it isn't one likely to draw me into wanting to read the poem. The term "brownie" is also unfamiliar to me, but easy enough to figure out based on the rest of the write.

    There are some lovely images mixed in, but as Neon noted, it seems slightly disjointed...then again, each stanza could almost represent a picture by itself. I've mixed feelings on whether the dashes add to that in a positive, or negative, way...

    All in all a very enjoyable write, one I'm glad I had the opportunity to read.

    Good luck and best wishes,
    ~J.
    Remember...no editing once a judge has commented, until after the contest has ended.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    Hi there and welcome to the POW
    First off I must say I did enjoy this but would of loved to see more it was an interesting choice of theme my score will appear at the close of the contest be well.


  • Floorboards
    October 12, 2008

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    I thought this quite beautiful, lovely soft images and really well written,
    well done and good luck!
    Alex.


  • NeonRose
    October 12, 2008

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    Welcome, Cutiepie

    The idea behind this write, and the images promoted within it are its strengths. A few moments in time, captured forever.

    I did feel that the shortness of the lines, combined with the wide spacing between stanzas, gave this write a 'disjointed' feeling. There seems to be no real flow from one thought to the next.

    I am assuming that the period in your title is a typo, since it does not belong.

    I chuckle, as I wonder how many people reading this will even know what a "brownie" is...the world moves so quickly these days.

    Over all, this was a pleasant write, enjoyable to read. No major errors in grammar or punctuation. I, personally, would have liked to see this 'fleshed out' a bit, with more depth and less space.

    My scores will appear with final remarks. Best to you in the contest!

    Remember, no editing once a judge has commented.

    • cutiepie gold member
      October 12, 2008
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      Many thanks for your kindness. My apologies for the double spacing but I was experiencing difficulties trying to post this entry and it was either double space or no stanzas at all I will try to correct after the contest is over


  • ZachP gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    Lynne, it's always a risk entering a contest that you're in... especially a PO' where you're trying your hardest... you are a formidible opponent. And this is excellent, as usual !!

    Good luck, my friend!
    Zach

    • cutiepie gold member
      October 12, 2008

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      Thank you Zack for your lovely comments I do so enjoy these contests, but I would hate for anyone to feel intimidated by my appearance I find these contests challenging and a real delight! So, come on in and feel the water

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