Heaven is the kind of place.
The place you wander around trying to embrace.
We embrace the true feelings in our insides.
" In Heaven, your feelings never hide. "
He will be there
there to help you while in despair
This life is an obstacle course
to test if you can obey your father.
Once you have confessed
and finished the quest,
Our Father will bring you home, blessed.
Thats the time, to close your eyes...
and rest.
A contest entry
- Tell me about Heaven by Demington.
1300 points, ended November 24, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does it make sense? Do the rhymes go with the parts?
Comments
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Not a whole lot of detail about heaven, but a good train of though with some truth to it.
They say brevity is the soul of wit. Maybe so. -
This does make sense
You did an awesome job. Well done
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Oh the ending of this was beautiful - so calm and peaceful, and, as I do believe in God and his HEaven, just the perfect ending for me to wind this all up. Beautiful write; best wishes in the contest
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