Can you smell that bitter sweetness?
The taste still lingers on my tongue,
Leaving me craving for more,
Although I don't like what I've done.
I hate myself like no one else can.
I use to want to be like this,
Have incredible powers unknown to humans,
And it happened with that regretable kiss.
My heart doesn't beat.
It shouldn't be able to, so it doesn't anymore,
I'm a beast, a monster, taking life from the inoccent,
Just to fulfill the deed to live some more.
But I don't want it.
I don't want to bear this curse any longer,
I want someone to kill me to get rid of this unbearable anguish,
that way I won't be better than the others, no longer stronger.
I'll be dead.
I'll burn in the fires of Hell,
unforgivable, unlikeable, forsaken,
please let me go, cast me into the neverending cell.
I want to go,
You'll make me go,
Or I'll make you go.
Author notes
OPTION 6::_
from the point of view of: Vampires
Username: Upperworld06
A contest entry
- War Con't. (Part Four) by Riftkin.
600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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That first line caught my attention and held it, it was such a powerful play on words,
"Can you smell that bitter sweetness?"
Smelling the taste; wonderfully written, definitely the best line of the poem if you ask me!
Thanks for entering
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Great write, The flow was great
I liked this poem.
Best of luck in my contest..and thanks for entering.
Tash.
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nice write
this is my favorite of yours.
very visual and very visceral.
big clappies!
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Outstanding!!!
Great narrative, rhythm & flow...
Beautifully captures the plight of the vampyre cursed with a conscience...
Well done!!!
Good luck in the contest...
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This is fantastic.I truly love this.Great detail.Marvelous!Good flow.Great description.I truly enjoyed reading this.
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I wish to thank you for entering these contests. I am sorry, but the War has come to an end, please keep your eyes open as I will host, other types of challenges for those that liked my war contests.
Riftkin.
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we in the Lairs of Dragon hear your mighty call...
unto the Altars of honor we could deliver your soul!
Bathed in fire...released eternally!
come crawl upon our thrones and beg mightily!
flamesdragoness
the war continues in the realms of light and dark.
poor pooor pitiful vampyre beast!
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i haven't been able to read all of the entries but these are my favorit so far, Death of a Broken Planet and Play Dead.
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