I pricked my fingers
filling you with
loves devotion,
never knowing just
how shattered you
truly were,
till the day I
saw you spilling
me dry on the floor,
and I knew all
diamonds had flaws.
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- My first contest, please help !!! Allowing PW,s by justgot2loveme.
2200 points, ended October 13, 2008, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Congratulations. This is short but very intense poem.
~Sonja~
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very interesting piece. I like how you pack so much emotion into such a short piece. it's very good. thank you.
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SHORT AND FULL OF BEAUTY.
I LOVED THIS PIECE.
EXCELLENT WRITING.
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST.
JUSTGOT2LOVEME
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Brilliant in emotion and imagery! Excellent entry for this contest and my best to you!
Linda
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Most definitely all diamonds have flaws.. and some indeed shatter! Fantastic write for this pic!
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I think we have all felt like this at some time or another. Well done
Juls
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I really like this one
me thinks there is no such thing
as a flawless diamond
hehe
applause
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What can I say... You have placed the emotion so vividly into this write. Well done. I would definitely like to have this one in "Broken Dreams". WELL DONE!!!!
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Now THIS is going into my bookmarks, I think I have felt this horrible feeling but the way you worded this opened old wounds I thought had healed some. Best to you my little kindred spirit. But thee shall be wearing gold by day's end
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