Fear filled in
the spaces
left by love
allowed to rot
inside a warm
and eager
heart
too quick
to dream.
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Em...
Am unsure if the presentation is intentional but to me it's akin to being almost trophy-like....it is as if you are saying with words and presentation here is the trophy heart that was lost...in the shape of this space...now remains the lesson and loss that fear filled instead...quite an impact with just twenty one words...and every sigh and syllable is heard...
Love and Light
Yvette
hey...did you ring the special phone line in the tabloid re should JS stay in SCD or take the free cruise...no ...neither did I...bless ...he was nice but oh my!
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i love this, so short, so sweet of poetry, great work! i loved it!
Fear filled in
the spaces
left by love
allowed to rot
inside a warm
and eager
heart
too quick
to dream.
it was so short, but held so much.
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Wow
This screamed at me! It says so much with so few words. I felt the pain and fear of the ending and the heartache of it all. Fantastic. You put me where you are or were. Great job.
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Ouch. This is painful. It was short, simple, but oh so painful. Holy crap. I really wasn't expecting this. This poem is a lot like my earlier stuff. Wow.
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good short poem, its direct an brings an effect of love lost and loging.
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Everything is simply spaces. Nothings and somethings, that's all we are all the time as we desire to make something from our nothing. The act of creation is a magical thing, when you think about it, a blank page becoming something more as you write on it. Loved this poem. Makes me think.
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Love tend to do that. Strongs to you.
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thanks for reading! peace
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Its all good. Trying to go to as many pages as possible, I need the feed back. Could you do me a favor, and read "THERE IS A PLACE" I know it may be a bit long, but its a personal fav, and I'm the only one who has read it, cause I wrote it.
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oooh sounds like someone i know. love the image of this, fear bleeding out of a beat up love filling up all the cracks and then it rots. WOW. i love good poetry, images, weird thoughts, wutever, i just like it good and not boring and not cliche. awesome write
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Truly Great
A brilliant title and then the poem is nothing different whence in the background so encopasses me betwixt the love of apprehension which envelopes me the reader with your immortal lines of too quick to dream like the heat melting the ice cream....Shubs
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thank you so much for reading shubs-your thoughtful words are always most appreciated. x E
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Damn is right
You just took meto to a next step inside mydelf. like being struck very blunty blunt.
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glad you saw something in my words- peace
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Daisygirl.
DAMN.
YOU ARE just freaking amazing sometimes, know that?
I think this poem is so very true, and painful and unfunny. Very stark too darling. I hope things are alright with you, you knw I am here for you always.
Okay,
Love you always my little English Sistergirl,
jin
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thank you-glad you enjoyed this one Jin x Em
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