Looking deep in your eyes, there’s no feeling at all
You promised me that you would catch me when i would fall
Arguing everyday, feelings are not as strong
I now understand, with you I don’t belong
Fighting a losing battle day after day
You’re a different person, you’re pushing me away
This isn’t happiness, crying alone once again
I’m losing the strength to deal with all this pain
Looking back on our memories, I slowly crack a smile
Over a year and a half together, has it all been worthwhile?
Laughter turns into shouting, we are no longer happy together
I guess that it just wasn’t meant to be forever
I can’t find the strength to end it with you
I know you wouldn’t deal with it, you’ve told me what you’d do
‘We’re meant to be’ Was the words that you once said
You always talked about our future, planning for things ahead
Deep down I love you, but it’s not in the right way
Struggling to decide if I should stay
Hold me close and give me one last kiss
I’m sorry, I didn’t want it to be like this
Author notes
*Pink sparkling panther*
Option 3 - Love
Crap I know
But I am so confused right now
So if you've got something bad to say just don't bother
Cause I don't care
A contest entry
- Options For Everyone!!!! And yes that includes you! by joleahe.
300 points, ended October 29, 2008, 41 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love the title! Hahaha. And your take on the prompt was really good. A great write. Congrats on the Bronze love. I am liking reading all your poetry! I should have done this sooner. Sorry
But work and life just get in the way sometimes!!
Much love
Ylova
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aww, i understand those emotions. sometimes life just gets confusing i guess. sorry im not very helpful here. great write though. very relatable
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Thank you for your comment.
It means a lot to me.
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Man..... I can def. relate to this.... full of emotion..
great write, take care
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awww that was really sad.I love the third paragraph.It reminded me of my crush I used to like last year.I liked it alot!
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oh i loved this i hope you dont stay out of duty or you think he might hurt himself all good relationships need worked at but i sense you have made up your mind long time ago and just are holding back because the shit will hit the fan dont be held down
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Thank you for your comment
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Wow i guess things have gone back to shit huh? lol message me sum time we'll talk peace love & drugs!!! -
Life repeats itself, as is its way. Happiness pain happiness pain. Breaking the circle is the hardest part, but the longer it takes the better and stronger person you'll be in the end. Everyone nowadays is dealing with woe and hardships beyond thier years. Hardships that people didn't used to go through. But trust me, the cycle ends.
And the poem wasn't crap at all, one cannot judge art, for as long as it expressess the way you feel accuratly even in the slightest fraction, a childs picture is just as, if not more glorious than the mona lisa.
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Awe, I'm sorry about this. I hate reading when friends are in bad times.
I do really like the rhyming, though; it's beautiful. Like I said in my most recent poem, it seems that our best works are written in the worst of time.
Again, it's beautiful, but sad.
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Well what the hell dear I thought you were happy love
I like it when you rhyme
Did this help you get back in the rhyming mood?
Lovely job babes!!!
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Pffft, love isn't always rainbows and butterflies
Just a bad patch that's all
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staceeeeey my little kidney bean (i dont know either)
you need some kirky love and we need a nice long chat about this
i cant have you being like this and such
if you want to end it end it he wont do what he said hed do i promise
looooove you
xxxxx
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Nothing like this should be considered 'unworthwhile'. The poem is straight-talking with a level gaze, and the rhyme blends well into the meter. There are layers of emotion buried beneath the surface, and it sounds a little resigned...but I'm sure most people can relate to something like this at sometime in their lives.
Well thought-out and put together.
Mordegast
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that was NOT in any way crap love! Korrrrr being my freakin 180 yr old grandma with that bludy electric wheelchair running over chavs u can still write pretty good
Now for the more serious stuff! Been there done that babe but when I did I literally closed my eyes and jumped Knowing that if I got it wrong I couldn't go back, not knowing who would catch and I suggest you don't do that because I had some one waiting to catch (Liam) but thats not the point, you've gotta be sure.... A year and a half is a long time and its not a joke BUT you're 18 babe you can by no means be sure of a future and know that in 30 years you'll be happy with the person you're with now!
However love, arguements are a big part of every relationship and you argue with the people dear to you, and the people you feel most comfortable around sleep on it and don't blindly jump (you don't need to listen to me But I'm here if you need) love ya x x
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God you are amazing!
You really helped me today and it means so so soooo much to me!
I'm so proud of my grand-daughter!
You really are one in a million
♥
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what's up?
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Nothing it's just thoughts
I'm losing my mind at the moment
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This was awesome. I love the rhyme and flow in it! And i love the emotions that flow through it, you've expressed your emotions pretty well here Hope all's well. Cheers!!
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