My spirit release
as my soul flee's into
the night
I'm summond by forces
which cry unto me
On wings of liberty
my spirit soars beyond
earthly realms of gravity
Demons chase me along the
vast dimensions of space,
somewhere betwixt and between
heaven and earth
I elude impish monsters
that stir intense fright
within me
Traveling at speeds of jet
propelled inventions
My body toss and turn
in great unrest,
subconsciously awhere of
these demonic nemesis
Surreality fuse with reality
as daunting images jade my being
Blurred visions keep me entranced
in ignorance of the dangers
that lurks around every corner
How can I explain the depths
of fear and terror that plague me
I am a prisoner of some tormenting
fate which I'm destined to play out
night after night
Cold sweats and exhaustion bathe
me in constant turmoil
As I flee for my life in
and out of the twilight zone
crying to my creator for help
in the darkness of this
most troubling of dreams
A contest entry
- Enter Sandman - a suzi & jan contest by jantastic.
3500 points, ended November 7, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Man, Suzi keeps beating me to the things I was going to say. I was also going to point out there are a few grammatical errors. I wonder if you really need "How can I explain the depths
of fear and terror that plague me" as really that is what the lines that follow attempt to do - explain it in some way however difficult it is to express. The unease of the troubling dream certainly comes through.
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There are some tense and grammar issues here that need to be parsed. Seems the sandman brings out nightmares for quite a few
Good luck & thank you for entering.
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a very great way to bring one into darknes huh? this was a smooth red Mr. Howard good luck to you in the contest
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Ignore the rambling of the amateur below me....LOL!!! j/k!! I agree with Swan this is a true example of the grit and pure talent you possess...great job!!!
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This is a perfect example of what you and I were discussing! You writing skill is unparalled. this piece is spacey, imaginative, mind twisting..and just plain awesome!
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