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We used to build Dams

Clouds obscure the sky,
Water cascades down from above,
Flowing down the road, it's own little river
Sweeping away the leaves and dirt
Like so many lost memories of childhood
The smell of the rain on Autumn leaves is intoxicating

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    hehe, i like this, and i have to agree, the smell of that is intoxicating thanks for entering and good luck
    Stephanie ♥