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Thistles Now Grow In Profusion - Wordflair

 

 

 

Trek...

through muffled winds gentle touch

till the sun shimmers upon the beck

A singing bridge that hums in its clutch

rickety, rusty, spanning times of yore

I'll chance upon my childhood's door

 

 

Neglected...

thatched cottage down the old dirt track

wild roses linger in time unaffected

My fragile bones transport me back

where happy memories come to the fore

I'll chance upon my childhood's door

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Form: 'Wordflair' my own creation.

Prompt: Sometimes we are just drawn home, at certain times in our lives. This is one time for me, and I get to have two days with family and friends. It is an irresistable urge, to return once more to our birthplace.

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  • BellaAmare
    January 31
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    Well Penned,

    Beautiful and creative. Great job. I loved the way you described the bridge.

    BellaAmare


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 16, 2009

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    SO GENTLE AND SWEET!!!

    Yes, there are times when one who is far from home is taken back, back to the times when life seemed much happier and content.

  • Theasp
    November 12, 2008
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    Holy moley!

    Thou art mistress of he human heart
    Divining what God would have us know
    Casting the chaff up
    Into the clouds of Time
    Hugs Ann the True Asp

  • Theasp
    November 12, 2008

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    beloved poet

    Thou art a mistress of the human heart
    Divining what God would have us know
    Casting up the chaff
    In the hollows of Time
    Hugs The True Asp


  • Room without doors gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Outstanding

    You create a picturesque poem that finds happy memories and a quaint cottage maybe in need of some loving attention. I liked the way you used repetition to enhance this poem and the subtle use of rhyme I enjoyed reading this poem which brought back some pleasant memories for me as well. Thank you for posting.


  • Shadow Wind
    November 11, 2008

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    been a while since I visited the site... great job on this one... pens a wonderful image of looking back on your life. really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    October 27, 2008

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    Oh. This is a great little poem that you have penned in here. And this is another amazing border that I've stumbled onto. It's really striking and it made it very easy for me to get into the mood of your poem. I totally know what you mean about being drawn back to your childhood home. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.

  • Royal Pen
    October 26, 2008

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    'My fragile bones transport me back

    where happy memories come to the fore

    I'll chance upon my childhood's door'
    I loved ur endinggg! those lines above were my favorite! A very beautiful and expertly penned write!
    well done
    --Pen


  • moon2u
    October 26, 2008

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    this is a wonderful poem

    for you

    Photobucket


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you moon for the beautiful picture you have left beneath my poem, I absolutely adore it

      Love and smiles ~Lilac


      • moon2u
        October 26, 2008
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        I fell in love with your handle
        and thought you might appreciate a bouquet of lilacs
        happy you liked them
        hugs Moony


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    Bandit Appreciation

    Thank you for your entry to this weeks reading list your paticipation is appreciated!


    The Poetic Bandits


  • WolfHeart
    October 19, 2008

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    Lovely and typically beautiful Lilac poetry. Returning to our home in our memories can be harsh, but usually our memory has erased the really bad stuff. Nicely written.


  • ml12
    October 18, 2008

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    Wow! This is heaps better than my entry for that contest! I liked the repetition that tied it together and the reminiscent undertones. Bravo!


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    October 17, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    This is a great form! I love your word choice, metaphor & rhyme! I could 'see' this so well. Your words bring such life to this. The background is amazing as well, all my fav colors! This is to me.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    October 16, 2008

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    I do really like this style the last line of this poem was so wistful and full of longing (to me) that it almost broke my heart ... the joy of this piece is also evident, and it takes the reader on a journey through your words into their own minds this is a stunning poem and I really enjoyed the read!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • DarkWind
    October 16, 2008

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    Well done, I really enjoyed this, the style is amazing and invigorating and brings the point home. As I said
    WELL DONE!!
    DW


  • ShelleyA
    October 16, 2008

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    Hi Sis. A beautiful write and form. Lovely expression of your childhood memories. Poignant. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, assonance and nice alliteration. Well penned and much enjoyed.


  • Lady Altheia
    October 14, 2008

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    This is a nice piece and I heard much of this form. It has a bit of a sad note to it. Good luck to you in all your future writing endevours Holmes.

    Your Watson


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    October 14, 2008

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    Exquisite

    I have commented already but revisit to support the reading list. This is a beautifully written poem about the happy memories of HOME in face of the present day changes. Very thoughtful and I like the form you have devised, very expressive!

    Dennis


  • azure85 gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    A beautiful form, and a lovely poem that draws the reader home with each line. A great ending, as childhood's door opens once more, thank you so much.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    Beautiful poem, Sis! I love the form you created, but moreso the images you conjure in my eye of a "singing bridge (I see a suspended bridge, low over a pond surrounded by overgrowth, beautiful wildness. The "ribbit" of frogs, thistle and looseleaf strife (purple flowers, of course) grow in bright abandon.

    The cottage is magical, from a fairy tale, old English style, like I've seen on Vancouver Island.

    Thank you for this journey to your home.


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    October 11, 2008
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    Very Nice!

    Lovely Wordflair form used to express the feelings of returning to a place of bygone memories. Good descriptive imagery and use of rhyme. Great Background! Well Done!

    Brother Dennis


  • Lauren Noir
    October 11, 2008

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    your form is beutiful. It's so hard to create your won form, and this is a success.

    firstly, the title is beautiful. Then as I opened the window I was stunned beyond words. this is just beautiful. Well done, you're gem

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