I wake up in my school nurses office, on the floor, leaning against a couch.
She tells me to go back to class, I oblige.
The office appears normal, except for the couch I awoke leaning against, which is not normally there.
I open the door, and where there would normally be a hallway, there is a vast plane. A clean sheet of dirt on the ground, under a gray sky.
On the far end of the plane is my school, consumed by an invisible tornado, it's roof being torn off.
My fellow classmates are fleeing the scene, though not in a panic.
Half way between me and the school is a desk, upon which is my agenda book. I run, towards the school.
I pass the desk, then remember I need my agenda book, so I run back towards it, grab it, then continue towards the school, strolling.
I enter, how I did I do not know.
Inside there is a hallway, at the end of which is a thin room running perpendicular to the hallway I'm in.
There's a desk dividing that room in half.
Directly in front of me there is a fat man in a business suit sucking the nipple of a large-breasted, very sexy blond.
They disappear off to my left.
A plain brunette woman asks if I would like a drink.
I say yes, and hand her 20 dollars.
I go to the bathroom to relieve myself while I wait.
I come out, a dark fiery horse to my left rears up on its hind legs.
I run to my right, then make another quick right into a dimly lit hallway, black walls, red where the walls meet.
I run, to the end where there is a perpendicular fork.
On the wall at that point, the following is written, in glowing red text.
"God will fear his people"
I turn, dark humanoid figures, outlined in red.
I run through them as if they weren't there.
There is a light at the end of the hallway, I enter it...
I awake in reality, in the real nurses office... or is it...
Author notes
This one threw me for a loop, never wrote it down but it sticks with me. Some sexual frustration in there it seems, not sure what the hell the rest is. Went to the nurse after 2nd period to take a nap (our nurse rocked), woke up halfway through 5th. Was very out of it the rest of the day.
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I agree (once again) with Suzi. This really encompasses that oddity of dreams in how they differ from reality. That said, I too would like to see you play with the form and wording to make it a little less like an account or retelling and a bit more "poetic" if you will. I expect it would have even more impact. Thanks for sharing this.
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Ok, let me say this first..this (so far) h as the most dreamlike quality that I've read. Keep in mind, I've only read a few entries so far..so that isn't to say I won't come across more that do this...
I really wish you'd spent a bit more time on form. The blocky chunk of this detracts from what might actually be a really great entry..
Regardless, I thank you for bringing a dream that feels like one
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I apologize for the form, but honestly it's something I feel I can't compromise in pieces like this. I suppose some revising could be used to make it more accessible to others, but for myself this is how the dream comes to me.
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