cement pavements
glittering with reds & yellows
where my sister tries to teach
the leaves to fly
crisp air, singed with winds
wrapping my smile with his
as our laugh floats, airborne
on our lips
the skies toss and turn
with reds, blues and oranges
and we almost tread the clouds
with a stolen kiss.
Author notes
option two.
A contest entry
- A Contest by luna-midnight.
700 points, ended October 19, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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so beautiful.
you described autumn like it was the most perfect season in the world.
great job! this poem really stood out from the rest~
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wow wow wow!
WOWZER MUCH!!! oh my dear lord.. (okay i gotta calm down) i'm actually excited for two reason... firstly, YOU ENTERED THIS CONTEST TOO! yay... thats awesome buddeh... okay and also because this poem made my jaws drop (no panic, i picked em out soon after)
but like seriously, this is simply stunning. how.do.you.do.it? and your last stanza... the last line... oooh, it gave me the tingles! keep penning, and all ze best for the contest hon, think u deserve something massive for this
haha.
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hmm, this is a beautiful scene you've painted, thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
Stephanie ♥ -
beautiful darling!
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aaww
I love the beautiful imagery and the lovely feelings invoked through this poem.
This seems to portray the future and how lovely autumn brings out joy and pure love.
The last few lines were beautiful and were a bit surprising which made the poem lovely and amazing. I love autumnso this poem is one of the est I ave read so far and it made me wan to just run away to a place with autumn. 
with you in to. ood luck!!
transit~
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