[Verse 1]
You left me-
Left me standing in the rain,
All alone,
With no one else around,
Surrounded by my pain,
I then cried-
[Chorus]
You were my everything,
My air,
My heart,
My life,
With you gone
The pain is just unbearable -
And it hurts to breathe!
[Verse 2]
Has the pain faded?
Or am I just numb?
Numb from the shock,
You left so suddenly-
I never would have expected it!
[Chorus]
You were my everything,
My air,
My heart,
My life,
With you gone
The pain is just unbearable-
And it hurts to breathe!
[Bridge]
My air is running thin
I can not breathe with out pain!
Please come back-
I need the air
So it won't hurt to breathe!
[Chorus]
You were my everything,
My air,
My heart,
My life,
With you gone
The pain is just unbearable-
And it hurts to breathe!
Unless you come to me.....
It will hurt to breathe!
Author notes
I hope it is okay that I wrote in song form because I was thinking of writing a song based off of New Moon and then I saw this contest and that option and it just flowed out of me.I wrote this based off of New Moon (when Edward leaves Bella) by Stephine Meyer the title & it hurts to breathe used it 3 times and if u count when i said, "It WILL hurt to breathe!" or "So it WON'T hurt to breathe!" it will be 5 times.
A contest entry
- *~* Enter And You Wont Regret! Many Options *~* by Shannon62875.
320 points, ended October 14, 2008, 38 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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um my name is chelsea and i wondering if i could use this poem with your premisson to make my own personal soundtrack. please email me back at twin1chlsea@yahoo.com
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WOW!!
This is a very good write!!! I usualy dont really like poems that dont rhyme... but damn did i love this one!! you did an awesome job.. and the fact that this isnt a prewrite gives you an even better chance!!! You did a great job and i can also relate somewhat to this write... I loved the way you put it like a song.. it was very well done!!! Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!1
Shannon*Leah
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