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Colorful Emotion

Flitting through the trees,
flowing through and back out.
Sailing over empty fields,
eclipsing the stars from above.
When the sky colors with rage and envy,
the lights overtake all.

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  • feetus
    October 14, 2008

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    Brilliant!

    I really enjoyed this. I like brief writes,
    especially when they tell alot with few words.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck!


    • Autumns Soul
      October 14, 2008
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      Thanks

      Thank you so much for the praise. I love hearing that my work is appreciated and liked by others.


  • narcissist
    October 10, 2008
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    When the sky colors with rage and envy,
    the lights overtake all.

    beautiful write, i really enjoyed the short potency of this