I met you in the hallway passing through to my class,
IT was like time had stood still for just a moment
Your eyes met mine as we passed on that fateful day,
I dropped dead where I stood and I remember you running after me
I awoke with your bright ocean blue eyes locked to mine,
And then it happend♥
A contest entry
- My first contest, please help !!! Allowing PW,s by justgot2loveme.
2200 points, ended October 13, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just a ? do any of you think this is good
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I am wondering what is next LoL.
I very much enjoyed this.
Hope ther is a part two coming soon.
Good luck in the contest.
Justgot2loveme
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And then it happened.... what a wonderful way to leave us pondering
Beautiful expression of emotions!
My best to you in this contest!
Linda
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ok this is great,
but I am waiting more.
Very good, but you leave your readers hanging.Like and then it happened, " what happened ".
Great writing.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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well
thanks so much i take all criticism good or bad... note i am just a beginner My sister told me about this site but thanks again!♥
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I like this it was cute
Keep up the good work Good Luck in the contest -
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Thanks so much for the comment
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