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What You Never Knew

Sorry for the tears,
and sorry for the lies.
Sorry that your words lost all meaning,
that I wouldn't deal,
that I chose to live in dreams.

Sorry I never measured up,
but you're the ones who set the bar.
Sorry there was no goodbye,
but you missed the warning signs.

I'm better than you saw,
and stronger than you knew.
You never found out about the stories,
you didn't know I drank away.
Don't blame me,
you never asked.

 

When there's nothing left to say,

and all my dreams are gone,

I'll make another toast,

to your rose-tinted glasses. 

A contest entry

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  • Lagrimas
    December 7, 2008

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    Those who don't see

    And those who don't speak... there are so many of us who get caught in this web. Thank you for sharing and good luck...


  • Riftkin gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    If this was your last poem, it would show the world the wonderful poet you are.
    I am honour that you wrote for my contest.

    Riftkin


  • candyinchelsea
    October 11, 2008

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    deep

    amazing write,
    this is such a great poem. it feels so personal.
    noone ever knows what they have when its in front of them. its so cliche but true. its only when you are gone do they realise how fabulous things were. i hope if this poem is real that you have found someone who puts the sparkle back in you eyes. and truly gives you the love that you were intended.
    good luck in the contest
    candice


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    A gret apology of life and what she never knew because she didnt ask. That three letter word gets us in lots of trouble..


  • Darkened Seraph
    October 10, 2008
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    I liked reading this, the imagery is all there and the flow is strong but it feels like something is still missing, I think if it was slightly longer it may work, or possible shorter I feel the amount of the word 'sorry' was used too much the second line would work so much better in my opinion without the word sorry, other than that a very good write, good luck in the contest

    Seraph


  • hoope
    October 10, 2008
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    nyc poem .. enjoyed readin it

  • hoope
    October 10, 2008
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    nyc poem .. enjoyed readin it..

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