Eyeliner thickly paved
round’ her dark sullen eyes,
jet hair framed pale face;
must be goin’ nowhere,
so they believe not in her,
but in her sinister colors.
Yet she flourishes in school
beside the “colored” boy;
an implant from the ghetto,
destined to fail, or so they believe,
the American Dream gone bad
in all their pompous prejudice.
Together they hold hands and unite,
to promote “Stop the Killing”,
while crowds of all colors gather;
a black balloon floats for every child lost,
black guns of every kind surrendered
to awaiting police.
These two know bigotry and hate.
Beatings and deaths over black;
from those blind to the sub-surface
or too afraid to admit connections.
Perhaps our two embrace their diversities,
knowing color is only color wherever it be.
pic:: http://punk-duck.deviantart.com/art/Goth-Person-3659089
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- AVID(Anti-Violence Initiative Day) theme: unacceptance by BrittlesSkittles.
850 points, ended December 27, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Speak Up! I Wanna Read Passion In Your Convictions by karma-n-peace.
925 points, ended January 1, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do not judge me. by Serenity-words.
1800 points, ended April 19, 68 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I love this. Good luck and keep writing. You're invited to the next round -
great write! thank you for entering my contest and sharing this with me, good luck =]
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this was great
i found this so qood, i always speak about thinqs like this
truly wonderful its time to tell people to tune into the world
keep writinq ma
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Wow this is amazing...A very powerful poem for a very powerful subject...Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!
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Very nice. It's ridiculous how people want to hurt others because of stupid expectations. Very nice write and thanks for sharing.
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This was in another contest
I sponsored, I remember it well the interesting connection to black on black crime. Beautiful write and good insight. Thanks for entering enjoyed reading it again. -
wow, seriously? Great Spirit, people are crazy. amazing poem, i just hate that people actually do this kind of stuff. thanks for entering
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this was a great poem and the prompt for writing it was well received and well needed to be written about. thanks for entering
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This was amazing. I'am truly at a loss of words, this is exactly what I wanted in this contest. You envoked the kind of emotion, dead on that I was lookin for.
Great job, and welcome to the finalists list.
~Serenity
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points for great write!!!!!!!
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AWESOME!!!!
I love this! I have been the "other" for most of my life. Given the American nightmare because of my own appearances. I have been a goth, a grundge kid, and though I have never been African-American, it is easy for me to understand the horrible odds anyone who is not a part of the they...a part of the accepted herd...has to face. This touched me, because when I was younger, I was discriminated against by my peers for not being like them, and it hurt then. Great write, i appreciate the tone of this. -
Thanks, poet, for entering
Interesting twist the violence against those of color and the goth comparison, and how hate crimes are hate crimes. I too am involved in a "stop the killing" movement and so true that hate can strike any color, creed, lifestyle, ethnicity, etc. Nice read after I just listened to "Let freedom ring" in re-play of famous MLK speech. Deep, poignant, powerful write. -
Together they hold hands and unite,
to promote “Stop the Killing”,
while crowds of all colors gather;
a black balloon floats for every child lost,
black guns of every kind surrendered
to awaiting police.
While reading this I was reminded of a couple of things; the Oct. 22nd Coalition and anthother instance when peaceful protesters were beaten and silenced.
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i like your reference to colors and the message behind this poem is simple but meaningful. thanks for entering!
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Your words speak profoundly of the racism that everyone pretends is not alive in the country. I really like this.
"Together they hold hands and unite,
to promote “Stop the Killing”,
while crowds of all colors gather;
a black balloon floats for every child lost,
black guns of every kind surrendered
to awaiting police.
These two know bigotry and hate.
Beatings and deaths over black;
from those blind to the sub-surface
or too afraid to admit connections.
Perhaps our two embrace their diversities,
knowing color is only color wherever it be."
Absolutely true. People forget that racism works both ways. It's not just all against one. It's everyone against everyone else- if that even makes sense. I hope your message is conveyed to many because this nation needs help with this subject. Thanks for entering.
Peace
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an excellent powerful write with strong language about a sensative subject...very nicely done.
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hey, please mention the cause you are concerned for in your author notes ..
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Well penned...
Good luck,
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Nicely done. I despise racism. My oldest daughter is dating a man from Kenya. Your poem reminded me of them.
Great job.
Mike
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You amaze me with your talent, imagery and skill in this write! Your passion for justice and unconditional love shine through here..Bless you for writing this...Adding it to my Bookmarks!
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Very nicely done. You show two different yet similar prejudices and injustices in this piece. Very good take on the color. I hope you do well in the contest.
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wow
Very profound, very moving a great message about being with who you want to without fear of what others say! I'm so impressed my friend. lots of luck to you in the contest!
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