you left an absolute goodbye
now days become an eternal night
strength turned into weakness
when I lost the glow of your eye
suspended on the middle of a bridge
you left an absolute goodbye
and the echo of my awry songs
resounds on the ropes a sad message
how to rebuild dreams when
now days become an eternal night
when now even the cry is muffled
and there's no reason to smile again?
yet a pulsing heart couldn't bear to see
strength turned into weakness
a new bridge showed at the end of sorrow
leading to a place where I should be
I learned the meaning of sadness
when I lost the glow of your eye
but a lament has its moment and fades
for old dreams are seeds of tomorrow's promise
Author notes
options 2 and 3
The song is Travessia by Milton Nascimento. This song is about 30 years old, and still a success
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jo5UlFDTZ6g
To its version in English
http://www.lyricsfreak.com/m/milton+nascimento/bridges+travessia_20159105.html
In a list
A contest entry
- HUGUENAUTIES CONTEST No. #37 - Cheers for Hugh and Edna by huguenauties.
750 points, ended October 24, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Dear Gaze, Congratulations on your Green trophy.
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Ah, the new emerald glow
enhances our Gaze, who already
shimmers in gold and silver!
M-C -
Blankscreen's comment was like, so succinct.
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Don't you just love it when plans work out just right! Congratulations on the green trophy in the Hugies contest!!! Another green for Emerald's growing HM showcase.
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I lost count of how bridges I've crossed. Maybe I should write a book. Your version is so solemn and melacholy compared to the original and thought-provoking. I loved it very much.
Gregg
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Dear Gaze, before my marriage to Bob I was left in the middle of the bridge three times by those I thought loved me but, I made it to the other side and met Bob who has been with me for 46 years, so I came out the winner. A beautiful poem that is filled with emotion.
Love Joan
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"I learned the meaning of sadness
when I lost the glow of your eye"
A hard thing to read and to not feel those words, even if the last ones do suggest a more optimistic tone.
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I cannot think of many old songs that young people in the US would know, a shame...there is such wisdom here in these verses...and this poem is like the song...a message of enlightenment along the paths of life... a beautiful poem...all the best to Hugh and Edna...h
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Your lyrical poetry has to be as beautiful as the song. Unfortunately I cannot hear the lyrics to the song. My speakers were blown, by my youngest son a month ago, and they are still blown out LOL
But I do hear, ever so clearly the melody in each verse written here. This is beautiful! I am sure Queen Edna will be charmed by your poetry, and by viewing the Youtube link
Te best to you in this Get Well tribute/contest dear sister! Edna will be healed after she's read al these lovely sentiments.
Always ♥
Renee
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I read the English lyrics and listened to the song. It's very beautiful! Your poem is beautiful, too!
Best of Luck in this contest!
Maureen
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Dear Gaze,
Your poem is very beautiful and there is always another bridge that will lead you to more happiness. The lyrics to the song are lovely.
Hine
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Very beautiful
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a beautiful song
Travessia explores the metaphor of bridges wonderfully, thank you for the links so that I could enjoy them.
I like this variation of the retourne form, the extra stanza has added so much. It is a fine thing to turn failure and separations into new hope in other directions. Sadness does not last.
Best wishes in the voting.
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I think it is not as much sad as it is thoughtful, in a deep and soulful vein. It captures the essence of the remembrance of sadness, then gently bridges to a lighter feel. It is the strength of that pulsing heart that breaks the sadness of the reverie. Laying a path for the delicate psyche to walk on towards a new promise. That pulsing heart becomes the vehicle of action, not only in your poem, but in life too. It provides the action, the movement, the rhythm, the desire to leave the sadness behind. I like words that help me live. These did. Thanks!
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A very hopeful, inspirational poem It's a meaningful piece, wisdom filled, lovely
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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"...but a lament has its moment and fades..."
Oh, wise to see this, to know this,
to empower and live with this.
Another treasure, Mariza!
And a beautiful, thoughtful, contemplative
view in the new avatar, restraining the fiesty
woman who also shares the view!
Multi bravos.
M-C
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"for old dreams are seeds of tomorrow's promise"
they do, they are...
I like the hope felt at the end...I was at a graduation this year, and a wonderful speech had a message similar to this...it was follow your dreams, and if you don't end up exactly there, (it was by woman in a wheelchair) then be the best with where you are at...and keep dreaming NEW dreams....
lovely...
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Dear gaze, A very lovely poem, may the bridge you seek one day you will find.
Good luck in the voting.
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Mi querida hija,
Ruego que, como su reparar puentes
sus dolores y sus canciones de tristeza
desaparecerá en el otro extremo
para ser sustituidos por la felicidad y la alegría ....
I pray that, when your bridges mend,
your sorrows and your songs of sadness
will vanish at the other end
to be replaced by joy and gladness.
Applause for your beautiful, although sad poem and best of luck in the voting. May your bridges lead from darkness into light.
Mucho amor, abrazos y besos, XOXOXO el padre.
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Gracias mi padre querido. Pero no tienes qui pensar qui estoy triste. My bridges always end to lead me to places where I feel happy
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Thank you for the English lyrics, they are quite good.
I hear that tune in my head as I read, it has that sort of wistful sensitive feel. And both end up with that tone of hope and promise, well hope at least.
I agree with narcissist that it is amazing...and that is a thing narcissists adore, to be agreed with.
Sorry, my comment sucks, my head isn't good.
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but a pulsing heart doesn't want to see
this is such an amazing write, very sad and still hopeful. i think it's well done though some of the rhyming's a tad off... it's very lovely, good luck in the contest. : )
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