I hear the lost cries for help
they are whispers rushing my head
with it's pleas for some faith
The whimpers sound so sharp
they slice my very thoughts
and leave me without hope
The thick air chokes me
so I cannot cry myself to sleep
it seems I am forced,
the young and old go crazy
I sometimes stare in the mirror
to see if I can piece the pieces together
I see now a stranger
who is sickly, lost, and broken
I am alone
when I am surrounded by many
the days grow long
the nights grow longer
I have grown to believe that
the only cure is You
A contest entry
- Lets Give an embrace to all our men and women in uniform today by storiesuntold.
1800 points, ended October 10, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
written for my wife
Comments
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Your sadness and longing are well-expressed in this poem.
The ending is sweet and hopeful.
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My fiance read this with me, he's in the Army Reserves, but in 2001 he was sent to Iraq. He said sometimes those feelings are all too familiar...and that often times he feels the fear of being back there. (I pray that Never happens)
We think you did an exceptional job writing this poem, obviously...it came from your heart. I personally love the ending, in which you basically said, that because of your wife.... things will be and have gotten better.
Beautiful!
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This is very powerful!! I love how you express your feelings in this write!! This marvelous!! You did an excellent job!! I love it!!
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Very interesting
Ya we have to have faith!
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wow very awesome write.
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i really liked this..it is like you are remembering of the times when you were in the war...and just thinking about it makes me think that i am going thourgh the same thing....you are an amazing writer.
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A poignant reminder of the aftermath of war: even the so-called intact, unwounded bring home scars. Well-crafted and powereful, although painful to read. My very best wishes to your and your beloved.
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Semper Fidelis
This is a beautifully-written poem. It brought tears to my eyes, and I'd like to say please keep up the good work, and I thank you from the bottom of my heart, for supporting all my brothers and sisters in arms. Ooh-Rah.
Lance Corporal James McAmis, USMC
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great job! this really made me miss my son who is over in Iraq even more. God only knows what he is really going thru over there.
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Awesome
No one can ever imagine what one goes through unless you have lived it! What a great write. Peole need to remember our support helps keep them going. May you find yourself someday. It takes time God Bless and good luck!
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God Bless and keep each of you
Where ever you are . The uniform is a special material that is filled with more precious bodies with spirits that sore for us who count on them. May our love and suppotr never stop for any of you . When on our shore or on foiegn soils. Know someone thinks greatly of you always...mac
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Cannot imagine what you must go through, looking in the mirror and trying to find yourself between the shrapnel in your memory, and shards of what was - and what is now.
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Excellent indeed
Our embraces through prayer for our men and women are felt by those so loved indeed .I want to thank each and everyone for their bravery and their love for their country -
My computor jumped
This is exceptional and my heart goes out to all the service men and women afar and at home for often their is a battle once back home for often the memories live on memories they gave their all to never see it happen at home
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I Am so Sorry....
I am sorry you have to feel this pain and torment, but know that I will always be here for you heart and soul...I love you always. Yours in love and life, mandie
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