listen, do you hear
the last loons' departing cry
silence will soon reign
the lake still,in winters grip
only the north wind remains
In a list
A contest entry
- Tangible Rhythms by Harrisham Minhas.
700 points, ended October 15, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yes, I think that's right! Dream on it! I have to do the same thing.
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yes I will
past midnight, my day is catching up to me
Annie
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I'm reading your back pages! I like this one. The imagery is haunting. Much as we all hate revision (myself included) I think it would be interesting to rewrite this, not worrying about the form. For example, I see "Listen" as a single and evocative line.
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hmm
you are an excellent muse my dear, I will have to dream on this one, a very early write, a fist stab at Tanka
Hugs my friend
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A beautiful short piece.
Thanks for your entry.
Harrisham Minhas
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