People, stop pushing,
you can't pull me away.
Here where I am
is the place I will stay.
You give me your counsel,
though I don't even ask.
I'm not really listening,
my mind obsessed with it's task.
Stop pushing and shoving,
my love loyal and fierce!
You'll burn from my heat;
a fire burning for years.
I see that your talking
but I've turned off the sound.
My thoughts unfold into tears
as they quietly drop to the ground.
You think that you see me
but I'm not really there.
I'm lost and lonely in the distance
searching for answers somewhere.
Shh, be silent and still
as I retreat to hole.
Where my pain is my own,
I guard what's left of my soul.
Author notes
two hearts. #33-Silence is the most powerful cry. I wrote this after returning to work four weeks after my son's death. It it to the people (mainly bosses) who told me that day that I needed to move on, get over it and quit moping. I was/am very hurt and angry. Cindyloo
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B ravo
Oh yes I know this feeling all to well. Oh Cindy you did a fabulous job writing on this one. I just loved it. The contest is the absolute truth. Sometimes I think just a hug is best wihout in words. We just need loving support for it is a long journey of healing and people that haven't been through it can be most horrible with their words of you should be better now. HOGWASH that's ridiculous.. Oh I hope you can whether through this one ok hun at work. You are in my prayers. Best wishes in the contest...
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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So sad! So deeply felt!
I'm very sorry for your loss! This poem really expresses your feelings well! It is well constructed and nicely worded! This poem and it's images deeply convey your emotions and deep hurt for the loss of your son! Yes, I agree, you must move on and writing down your feelings can help you! Good work!
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I love it. I understand the message that you express in this poem and relate quite well. Your rhyming abillity is outstanding it really flows. You are indirect and that makes your readers read inbetween the lines and i beleive that is a talent among it's self. Good job and keep writing. ~Hollis
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This speaks volumes!
Every once in a while, I come across a rhyme poem that I like, cause I usually don't like rhyme. I understand how intrusive people are and can be. This reflects many of my thoughts at times.
I can't think of anything that needed to be changed.
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Everyone takes their own time to heal, and pick up life again. Only you know what is best for you. I hope things get better
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I feel like this alot everyone seems to push me to where they want me to be not where I am it is hard to deal with thanks for sharing be well
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people like your bosses can say all that there not living your night mare if you didnt love your son you could have just went back to work straight away they are not worth your anger nor your tears if loss like that came wrapping there door i would love t
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