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I test-drive a Mini Cooper S with full works tuning kit

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i. Tut Ankh Amun

all for dreams of whips and wheels

tyre-squeals and lions falling to my spear

the gear-shift that goads the horses

and the hooves that strike the hard sand

and oh that red-line sound all weight-to-ground

and Metallica blowing the speakers and

oh how the heads of Hittites and Assyrians

roll as the thunder bells

 

 

 

ii Phaeton

and all for dreams of golden wings and solar winds

lifting the inside wheels on a reeling bend

hot needles and beads of sweat in the crook of my arms

too close

                 too close

                                   the earth is burning

                                                                        my fear
is at war with the horsepower and each is magnetic

pulling against the traces and reins (trust the machine!)

(trust the machine!) I baulk at the next bend

too wide

                too wide

                                  the earth is freezing

 

 

 

iii Boudicca

the armour of princes

the dash before the crash

the blaring war-horns of the tribe

the headlong Gs

the rage

the urge to slam the door and murder

the leap to single combat

the steady hand

 

   green of profound British forests

   a shine as deep as a lake

   and that steady

   steadying hand

   hot and heavy on the metal

 

 

 

iv  “VII”

 

yes all for dreams of whiplashes and wheelspin

and whirling golden wings’ silent windstorm

the high battle-songs and stately hymns of triumph

yes and the spinning stars and the solidity of the sun

on the subtle turn of one little card

one touch upon the clutch

riding high

 

 

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  • Dark Otter
    November 1, 2008

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    This is a classic!

    You delivered everything I asked for. It is male and it is strong and in the first person. Once again you have demonstrated incredible versatility. I bow to your talent.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      November 1, 2008
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      Well that's the first time I have ever done anything that has been described as "male". I'll take it as a compliment.

  • Bad Bill
    October 11, 2008
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    Brilliant--nothing more need be said.

    In admiration,
    Bill


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 10, 2008
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    Hot Damn, what a ride

    The car doesn't sound bad either.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    Your test-drive is one well driven race with incredible pace, the language, repetition, internal rhyme all imbue a passion as this moves with a momentum that doesn't falter.

    A pleasure to read and to read aloud.

    Neat.


  • Dark Otter
    October 10, 2008
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    preliminary review

    Bloody brilliant! I wanted something new from you and I wanted something first person. You delivered on both counts. Thank you for taking it to the next level with a 'testerone' loaded adventure.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    3 years ago, my eldest owned a metallic read open topped Mini Cooper S, the Scream from a 1340 series A tuned to bursting point running at 8000 rpm would see off the entire Hittite hoard alone, it certainly seemed to have a significant effect on the knicker elastic of a large percentage of the population looking in his direction as he roared off to face the Assyrians at the Ace Cafe on a Tuesday evening...

    Oh did I forget to mention the poem, that's bloody good too


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 10, 2008
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      Thanks re the poem. The test-drive wasn't bad. I drive my Mini One like a maniac anyway.

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