Why?
Of those I have loved
Did you hurt me the most
This cloud that "loves" me
Holding it's magnifying glass
Above my burning flesh
While casting your feelings
Upon my blackened skin
You've made me bleed
What wasn't even true
Just something fucked up
you created
Switching the glass's position
Adjusting your confession
As big as your glass was
It couldn't see
The sun was being
Reflected right back
Yet in all your filth
Are we both burned.
Author notes
Had to get this off of my chest. What happened was really fucked up.
A contest entry
- For The Liars, The Cheaters, The LOSERS!!! by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended November 13, 2008, 36 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A life to fly so high by NeverRegret.
400 points, ended December 3, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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There is a nice use of imagery throughout - holding a great depth to the pain felt. I think there could have been something more to this - but can also say that this is something that can be felt, and is poignant as is. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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"Why?
Of those I have loved
Did you hurt me the most
This cloud that "loves" me
Holding it's magnifying glass
Above my burning flesh"
nice begining and nice imaginary and words combinations. I liked how you stated the hurt and betrayal[?].
I'm sorry this had to happen to you, no one would wish to live through this pain. I hope you heal fast, keep faith.
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Thanks for your comment. I'm still dealing with it. I wrote it today after what happened last night...
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I understand how you feel, partly I've lived it too. If you ever need to talk about anything, never hastate to msg me. take care.
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