I saw gold –
cradling a ruby flower
with heart-shaped petals,
embedded with pinpricks
of starlight,
floating at the center
of a small, dark pool
with banks of rose-beds
and fire-lilies.
Then they took my kaleidoscope away,
and all it really showed to be
was a shriveled daisy,
ridiculous with its white mane
ripped completely off
but for one ragged petal.
I looked for my kaleidoscope
and I found it
hidden in the depths
of the Heart and the Mind
and really, most of all
in the Soul -
and I saw gold.
Author notes
Is it kinda strange? Is the ending bad? Yes. Do I like it? Yes.
A contest entry
- 20 OPTIONS CONTEST!!! (My way) by ourgirlFriday.
600 points, ended October 11, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites From Only Children At Allpoetry by Violinstrings.
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Comments
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Oh my gosh
This is not strange the ending is not bad it is perfect IMHO I think that you have much talent congrats on your trophy win be well
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I loved this, your imagery was wonderful describing the views through the Kaleidoscope. And then using your imagination to see that poor little daisy with the Kaleidoscope of your mind. I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Well done.
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This was so pretty; I have a poem called Kaleidoscope too but i perfer the colours that you used in your one to the ones that i used in mine!
Congrats on the trophy kiddo!
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I like it!
I love kaliedoscopes! It's funny what you can see with them, just the prism ones I mean. I loved the fancy ones with bits of glass inside, but never could afford one. Lovely write indeed! Well done!
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