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4 am (working title)

It's 4 in the morning,
and everyone's snoring.
But here I am awake and alone

gone without warning,
away you were soaring,
giving me no chance to atone

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  • wander of the sky
    September 15
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    short to the point and interesting


  • Sir Squigglim
    November 29, 2008
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    short but brilliant.
    Your point is loud and clear... very clever


  • Erica Carnea
    October 26, 2008
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    short and sweet
    like the rhymeing
    love always
    erica carnea
    xxx


  • Alyzeh
    October 20, 2008
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    How funny, I just noticed the time when you posted this. It was 4:40 am then too?

    Oh God. Wow. :0

  • Alyzeh
    October 20, 2008

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    Ahh. It's 4:40 Am where I am right now.

    Definitely very sad. But a short and simple write with meaning! Good work!

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