Teardrops.

When rain falls on a broken heart
teardrops touch your eyes
emotion fills a bitter cup
and garnish it with sighs.

Memories like forgotten clouds
drift across your mind
memories of parting
of hearts once, soft, entwined.

Aching breezes touch the soul
while bitterness, sad, grows
a garden of forgotten words
hides a broken rose.

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Line prompt - When rain falls ...

A contest entry

Line Prompt by crivanea. 300 points, ended October 28, 2008, 14 entries
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crivanea
October 28, 2008

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good form..good fluency..there can be a few work on originality..but otherwise this is a good poem..thnx for entering

bigperm
October 10, 2008
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beautiful
your stanzas are very well balanced.envokes vivid imagery

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