You ripped apart my heart and tore out my guts
Blood pouring out through the raw open cuts
You thought you could love me but hurt is all you gave
You treated me like garbage and my emotions became your slave
Love became blind in ways I never truly knew
Until I changed who I became when I fell in love with you
I swallowed my pride and ate up all your lies
Ignored all the cheating and muffled back my cries
Through each new secret that was exposed a part of me died
But still the thought of losing you is what kept me by your side
Faith that you would stop, that maybe you'd just lost your way
That through continual effort and grace you'd change one day
How did our love morph into pain
And at what point did I start going insane
Feeling alone even when you were near
Doubting your words and stricken with fear
Where was your heart and why did it leave
Better to of loved and lost is hard to believe
Clouded by the present and mourning for the past
This is no longer a love that is worthy to last
The girl in the mirror deserves so much more then this
And what you once loved you now casually dismiss
Taken for granted, but once seduced by your charm
Despite my love for you I'm no longer yours to harm
Author notes
Just when i was scared to love again up came my knight and shining armor, my marine. We fell in love and got engaged and everything was a beautiful dream come true. Then without warning or reason 1 by 1 things started changing for the worst and he became someone I never knew. Our fairytale morphed into a nightmare you'd only see in soap operas full of scandal and betrayal. Granted love is a risk and it can hurt, but this was by far the worst story I've ever lived through in my life. Watching my very dreams die right b4 my eyes and deserving none of it. I wrote this mainly to vent out the hurt and just curious what others think about it, similiar experiences, or improvements if any?
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Comments
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I agree with you. That love is worth a fight for. That it is scarey but if it works... it's worth the fight. Thanks for sharing it and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Not too bad
This is the logical outcome of blind passion. You kept your eyes shut, can you blame others? Narration is tolerably good, but there are unpardonable spelling mistakes. -
this is stunning. So powerful and your poetry skills are amazing. Well done, amazing write, and beautiful rhyming skills.
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excellent
And at what point did I start going insane
Feeling alone even when you were near
Doubting your words and stricken with fear
Where was your heart and why did it leave
Better to of loved and lost is hard to believe
Clouded by the present and mourning for the past
This is no longer a love that is worthy to last
The girl in the mirror deserves so much more then this
And what you once loved you now casually dismiss
Taken for granted, but once seduced by your charm
Despite my love for you I'm no longer yours to harm
the above extarct made terrific reading.Thanks foe sharing.Please do visit my poetry and offer some comments.
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