Standing here in my corner of the world,
Invisible to the passerby,
The quick paces and angry faces,
Watching the people scurry by.
Polluted air swept in deep breaths,
A drunken driver unable to keep control,
The horns blaring and the people staring,
The family the paramedics try and console.
The neighborhoods are full of hate and sin,
So lost in our selfishness,
Innocence disappears from year to year,
Whose there left to impress.
Straying so far from what we knew,
Fighting a war thats already over,
A soldier dies with no goodbyes,
A debt he payed for you moreover.
Sick and cold and and all alone,
The man sleeps in his cardboard bed,
Hes fought for all hes got,
But can he fight whats up ahead?
Jets race through the air,
Nowhere to point the finger, we did this to ourselves,
They'll never find whats left behind,
Will watch as history repeats itself.
Standing here in my corner of the world,
Invisible to the passerby,
We're all aware of what goes on,
And we all just let it pass us by
A contest entry
- These Are The End Times! by bobanonymous.
942 points, ended October 25, 2008, 10 entries
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Thanks for the entry
Very Stream-of-Selfishness
I like it.
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Innocence disappears from year to year,
Whose there left to impress.
Straying so far from what we knew,
Fighting a war thats already over,
A soldier dies with no goodbyes,
A debt he payed for you moreover.
Yet another terrific write! Brought tears to my eyes. Great write!
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Fantastic Josh
Brilliantly constructed Josh, flowed so easily but what a great and profound narrative, and one with a punch .. very powerful 'the man sleeps in his cardboard bed' 'sick and cold and alone' may we not 'let it all pass us by' BRAVO !!! for this Josh
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Bravo Josh! This is brilliant; so well written - as yes, history does repeat itself but it seems the men in power never learn and just continue on making the same mistakes over and over and over again. Perhaps if they read works like this they would stop and think a little ; but probably not!
Hope you're taking care of yourself!
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SPLENDID
A very POWERFUL write !
This well reflects the idea that the world has become a self-centered society , preoccupied with materialism , where we dont understand the centrality of love and togetherness in society ....
Fighting a war thats already over, ....A nice statement this is ... for it holds the grounds of reality firmly.
Nowhere to point the finger, we did this to ourselves,
They'll never find whats left behind,
Will watch as history repeats itself.
These three lines are my favourite in the complete poem .
We're all aware of what goes on,
And we all just let it pass us by
A nice end given to the poem ... BRAVO !!!
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