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Heaven's Market

So I was on my way to the market getting some Halos and Wings
for the Rookies when I noticed a kind of sharply dressed man
sitting under the sinners tree.
I shook my head in disgust because I found out he was selling
faulty moonbeams and lightning.
Even Heaven has its fake salesmen sometimes.

Author notes

I think Heaven should have a marketplace somewhere for how big it is.


And when i mentioned the sinners tree i mean because Salesmen lie a lot (not all but some.)
I think that was a little joke so I hope people caught on.

I made this exactly 55 words although i had to count it out a billion times

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Comments


  • Rheea gold member
    October 26, 2008
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    you have me laughing


    • badnovocaine
      October 26, 2008
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      Hooray! I usually dont write short stories (dont really know how.)
      Thank you so much i appreciate it


  • Mirthryl
    October 14, 2008
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    Very original idea. Excellent title. Creative "sinners' tree."


  • worshipchick
    October 10, 2008
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    I enjoyed this a lot, cute idea. Nice job and thanks for entering!