So I'm sitting in the waiting room of my dentist playing on the Etch-a-Sketch. I draw a smiley face. The kid across the room is staring at me.
I've had enough. I stand up, walk to him, and kick him in the jaw. His head twists and his bones crack beneath my foot. Epic win.
Author notes
This was for a contest: write a story in 55 words or less.
A contest entry
- Stories- SHORT!!! sweet, and to the point... by worshipchick.
760 points, ended October 28, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
No, sir.
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yeah! (:
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Wonderful and Congrats.
I just loved it. Haha, I wasn't expecting that ending but when I read it I laughed so hard XP Because sometimes when I sit and wait somewhere and people are staring I imagine myself kicking them.
Epic win :]
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Congratulations on the gold ...
but not my genré, I must honestly say. Can you think how wondrous it would have been if the unexpected ending was without violence? But something beautiful that makes the reader float in wonderment? Please try another version of exit ... pretty please?
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Disturbingly funny.
Hahah. Epic win.
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Very kind of you, sir.
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Wow- twisted yet amazing. :-) I actually laughed out loud- I guess that means I'm twisted too... Thanks for entering!
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good fun. i wish though that you had given it some other title so the kick would've been even more of a shock ... you fooled me so well with the etch-a-sketch
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I changed it!
Thanks for the tip
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Have I ever mentioned how much I love you?
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