there's this sort of green glowing
like new life,
like everything I've ever wanted
is sleeping in the palms of my hands.
newly born clouds
behind the gray ones,
drifting off
to form a pristine white.
stale rain drops
dripping off the gutters:
the evidence
of what passed.
the remains
of something ugly
can be so beautiful.
subtle hope
found in the sun shining
through a half-lit sky.
moisture spilling
through the roots of lawns.
seeping into dirt,
being used
like a dirty joke
or a naive girl.
the redemption
after the storm.
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dirty jokes and naive girls ... aint that the life though... no changes needed... common words are the ones we use everyday and they can mean the most... great write... why is it not in a contest??? get it in there !!!
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Nice poem. But you should capitalize and punctuate a but better. Try to make the stanzas the same length. It would help if you put two of the small lines together and so on. And to finish, I would use the synonym finder to edit out the really common words.
I really like how you ended it with a simple statement. Good job!
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