Sometimes
my sugar packs cavities
Nagging pain
Pulsating conscious
I hurried vacant ties
Windsor knotted souls
Silk tongues threaded
Sewn across my eyes
Dodging mud balls
To wallow in my own dirt
Only I seen the worth
Of my manhood
Now strength lathers
Filth rinsed
I scrub myself clean
Author notes
PROMPT: "If I did not want others to violate my life, how could I voluntarily violate it myself?"
(49 Words)
A contest entry
- Quote Quickie by poetryality.
600 points, ended October 10, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hmm. this makes me think of wisdom finally accepted as valid, and trust in ones self too-stepping away from self destruction (sorta). Interesting. Congrats on your trophy.
peace
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This is powerful! The use of metaphor is skillful!
"Sometimes
my sugar packs cavities"
I just got over a bad tooth experience which makes your second line as relatable as the first.
"Now strength lathers
Filth rinsed"
Loved these lines! I got to the water... ~Sigh~
Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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thank u very much for the contest, it was fun.
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You are most welcome!
Renee
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This is deeply intense and full of gems.."Windsor knotted souls" "Dodging mud balls to wallow in my own dirt" "Only I seen the worth of my manhood" Just wonderful writing as always brother mine.
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