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Toys Don’t Last Forever

It’s sad when toys are torn apart
By jealous wolves without a heart.
A broken doll can never hide,
But even dolls can die inside.

She once was proudly on display,
Until her owner walked away.
It’s sad when dolls are cast aside,
But even dolls can die inside.

Relationships will change with age
And every child will turn the page.
Such toys no longer dignified,
But even dolls can die inside.

It’s sad when toys are torn apart,
But even dolls can die inside

 

 

 

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Prompt:
Quote:
"Death is not the greatest loss in life.
The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."
Norman Cousins

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  • Melodies
    February 18

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    I like this very much and am whisking it away to Poetry Planet where it will be admired by many people who will pronounce your talent blessed. Thank you!


  • penman gold member
    October 17, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Such a great creation. So very well done. Congrats on the silver. It was well deserved.


  • second-born
    October 11, 2008

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    this is so melancholic...yet so beautiful...and how you've interpreted the given prompt is very interesting...congrats on the silver!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    October 10, 2008

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    I cannot help but picture this as a metaphor for a trophy wife "Barbie Doll" who plays with the wolves and is lost to herself in the process. I can see her leading a broken life. This is a perfect Kyrielle Sonnet as the refrain carries the poem not the other way around. A wonderful entry in the contest and very deserving of the trophy!


    • Amera gold member
      October 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much. I love to see my intended metaphor interpreted in different ways.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 9, 2008
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    Understandable why this is a winner. Perfect for the quote.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    I never played with dolls, except a few times. They sort of scared me...lol However, with that said, I
    truly appreciate the message behind the poetry, and
    of course, your form and style go beyond compare
    Love, Lane


  • echo-ink
    October 9, 2008

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    So sad, and worst of all,
    so true.



    Love you, Amera, xx
    Bell...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    This is so sad, yet so amazingly written sis. Holds great depth about what effects jealousy can cause, and how often people are discarded in this life...

    I am bookmarking this! It's such a wonderful write!


    ♥


  • Faeryn
    October 9, 2008

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    Even your sad poems leave me sighing in awe after I read it. So amazing...
    Love the repeating line; first two lines are so powerful.
    Love,
    Tay

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Wow I did enjoy this. I like the third stanza the best very interesting thoughts within these lines thanks for your entry be well


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    *sigh* How wonderful. Had to read it a few times just to enjoy it again and again. It's beautifully sad. Written like a pro, as always. Good luck in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    October 9, 2008

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    Sis,

    What a beautiful read this one is! And your words are soooo true! I really liked this one, and the meaning found in your words!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    October 9, 2008

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    Oh I really liked this, so beautifully written yet so sad. I think that you did a great job with this! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

    Take care


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Beautiful and deeply meaningful poetry, the Kyrielle sonnet seems on the surface to be ideal for light and fluffy poetry, you have taken what appears to be a light fluffy story in a light fluffy form and created something that rises far above that,
    poetry.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    a poignant write filled with glimmers and shouts of truth and pain, but as with nature there always comes a fall and winter followed by a spring and summer. therefore when such bequeaths itself up in one's life, just remember the coming spring and go toss snowballs!!

    love ya

    Dad

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