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Cowards Hunt with Traps

a raccoon chasing silver
shiny and smooth
just out of reach

gnawing myself free
bloody ground surrenders
any hope for survival

hunted without mercy
dieing in agony

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mcw120588

amaranthine lover

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    this is an interesting write of yours, my friend


  • toomysterious
    October 9, 2008

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    Yes that is definitely a cowards way out (not really hunting then, is it?) and the animal suffers. I'm with you that is definitely not right. You did very well in conveying your point in poetic fashion.


    • mcw120588
      October 9, 2008
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      well its really kind of two edged. i mean i think its terrible that one would do that but also the bravery and courage of the raccoon to eat through his own leg to set himself free even at the cost of death. and this is the essence of the poem the ability to set oneself free no matter what the pain and cost of it. to not fear anything. so im not so sure if that all was clear but its kinda where i wanted to go with this piece