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Short and sweet?

Baby, you are the sweetest thing,
The way your eyes sparkle in the moonlight,
The way your lips touch my skin so softly,
And how your finger tips caress me gently.

You are the sweetest thing.

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    October 9, 2008

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    I liked this Short and sweet, just like the title I liked the last line, very cute indeed.
    I think that you did a great job with this. Keep up the good work!

    Take care


  • Harlequin Dance
    October 9, 2008
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    Aww it's so cute. Why the question mark in the title, though? It sounds uncertain, and the poem itself is anything but uncertain. I love the detail in it.

    Also, I would advise changing "and how" to "The way" like it is in the two lines preceding, so that the flow is not interrupted.