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Autumn Gold

Crisp and cool, the days grow shorter;
shorter days when night grows longer,
long nights that bring a sudden chill
chilling fast, life's window sill.


The window of life, as it makes its change,
changes made, earth's acting strange.
Strangely acting, as leaves turn bold,
and bold they turn when days grow cold.


Growing cold, the days slip by,
slipping days bring autumn's hi.
Autumn brings the cycle's glory;
a glorious cycle of nature's story.


This story of nature, it's cool, crisp air;
winds of cool show trees grow bare.
As bare trees grow, and this story's told,
telling the story of Autumn's Gold.

Author notes

I attempted the wreath, not sure if it is right, but I tried.

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  • Sad and Broken
    November 9, 2008

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    Hello this is Sad and Broken dropping in to read. Your poem. "Autumn Gold " is simply beautiful. I really like how you use our senses in this poem. I especially like how the last line of a verse goes so nicely with the first line of the next verse. Your fonts and the color of your background made this poem easy to read. I can almost feel the cool days turning to cold chilling winds. We are now beginning this cycle here in Canada where I live . A perfect title I see no errors


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    I think this is an excellent variation on the wreath, so I say fine attempt! I like the way you have constructed it out of quatrains-of-rhyming-couplets. Congratulations on the silver trophy!

  • ea silver member
    October 23, 2008
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    Both of your wreaths are so well done. The trophies do not reflect my feelings about them.

    • StormGoddess Greeters member
      October 23, 2008
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      I'm glad I was able to get the form down. I think I will enjoy writing other stuff using this form, it seems to flow nicely.
      Thank you again.

      Storm


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 17, 2008

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    Wow. You did a great job with the wreath form. Tough to accomplish. I enjoyed this very much and do LOVE those Yankee Candles. ~Pamela


  • mamaliz23
    October 16, 2008

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    very peachful, beautiful written poem. It has a calming feeling to it, just reading it, eased my nerves for some reason.Also great rhyming.

  • ea silver member
    October 10, 2008

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    a wonderful, rhyming wreath - just perfect! This is fantastic for a first try - you are a natural at this form! Thank you so much for this piece of Autumn gold.


    • StormGoddess Greeters member
      October 10, 2008
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      Thank you, and will definitely make adjustments. Appreciate your words.

      Storm

  • SoulWhispher
    October 9, 2008

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    Great poem, I really enjoyed this, as always you continue to excell, such poetry, great job, Blessings JOhn


  • PurpleEmoFoofCheese
    October 9, 2008

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    I love the acending feel of the way the poem is written and the way the story is told! It's for certain one of the most calm, yet beautifully painted peices i have yet read. Great job!


  • Rovingone gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Ah, what a delightful portrayal of the changing season. It is so worthy of the Storm Goddess to note the beauty of the Earth in all it's splendor. You captured it so magnificently with this poem. (It deserves to be mounted in stitch work on a wall in some Rockwellian type scene).


    • StormGoddess Greeters member
      October 9, 2008
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      Thank you hun, appreciaste your comment and compliment.

      Storm

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