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Easterly Winds

I push a pensive eye on graying skies
and hear the East winds whisper in the trees,
a breathy song of otherworldly sighs
brought mercifully by ghosts across dark seas.

A tender dreamer borne on spirit wings
brought here to me she lifts my burdened soul.
Suspended upon luminescent strings,
surrendering my thoughts I become whole.

A flood of purpose swells within my core
awakening what sorrowfully waits.
Inhaling, I on Euros’ zephyr soar
to distant realms becharming blissful fates.

This mortal life will never be the same
now Easterly winds softly call my name.

 

 

 

 

 

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Euros is the Greek god of the East wind.

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  • Purrsanthema
    February 24

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    It reminds me of some of the meaning behind Keats' Endymion. A beautiful sonnet. I'm particularly fond of line 2 which seems to carry the feel of the wind in it. I love the final couplet too, especially.

  • silverfish
    October 20, 2008

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    well. that was a mature and well crafted sonnet. i thought it was going to be another kind of wind breaking poem; instead i believe you have taken her breath away. -bubblesfish


  • owlish
    October 19, 2008

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    Love it! Love the title and the rhyme and the flow. Very gentle and beautiful image, fits well with the background. Good luck in the contest!

  • Eusebius
    October 17, 2008

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    Excellent

    There is really nothing like the use of alliteration and the sumptuous sorcery of sibilants to totally enthrall the reader as, indeed, this sonnet does to the nth degree! Excellent! I loved it! Bravo!


    • PerVirtuous
      October 17, 2008
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      Only a true poet notices the use of sibilants consciously. You identify your great skills in comments as well as in your amazing poetry. i would also like to point out that you and I also think not in metric feet, but in the meter of phrases. Poetry to us is not a march but a dance. Considering the rank and file of poets is completely hooked on the pedestrain beat, it is wonderful to share such thoughts with someone who has risen above. Thank you again.


  • jamiebeau
    October 17, 2008
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    Soft reverie of reassurance

    Delightful and oh so passive.


  • Griswold silver member
    October 17, 2008

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    Wonderfully done Allan, very smoothly flowing declaration of love for that special lady. Good job...Scott


  • poetgypsie
    October 17, 2008

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    "surrendering my thoughts I become whole"......thats my favorite line. If it was only that easy to surrender my thoughts anyways great write thanks for shareing


    • PerVirtuous
      October 17, 2008
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      Isn't that really the definition of love? Love is never reasonable. It can't be logically supported. One can only love completely by refusing to think and allowing only the feelings of love to overtake them. Thank you for your astute observation.

  • King-of-hearts
    October 16, 2008
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    I RELLY LIKE YOUR POEM


  • georgie
    October 16, 2008

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    perfect... your wording is beautiful and its just a stunning piece overall,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • nilav
    October 16, 2008

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    as the east winds whisper in the trees i felt a cold soothing feeling creeping into me while reading your poem...there is depth and poetry in your poem..the smooth flow and rhyme is also appreciable...


    • PerVirtuous
      October 17, 2008
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      This is more than "Boy meets girl and seduces her" this is about a love that lasts multiple lifetimes. A love that is ethereal first and comes to the flesh from there. Thanks for the comment.


  • scottstappswife
    October 16, 2008
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    Beautiful Write, Simply Breath taking it is short and sweet and takes you an a bit of an adventure.


  • SilverQ
    October 16, 2008
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    Wow, great poem. No negitive advice to be offered =) great flow and rhyme.


  • csmmoms2
    October 16, 2008
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    Lovely

    Eastern winds..inhaling. Ya I know this!

  • Farah
    October 16, 2008

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    Wow!

    You point cums across very well. The way u write shows taht u R a gr8 poet! Altho u probably knew that alredy! Im inspired.
    2 thumbs up!


  • daffodilblossom
    October 16, 2008
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    true love

    long time no hear great poem lovely lines


  • myrataal silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    Tender, mystical, content ...

    and truly beautiful a poem for your Love. Well expressed, Poet, and what a transformation! If Love is your Muse, poetry serenades to Love. I can but imagine the songs you shower on her!



    Be well Troubadour!

    Love
    Always Myra


    • PerVirtuous
      October 17, 2008
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      You may not realize this, Myra, but I am organically shy. Once I get over this the songs will flow like water. For the moment they are stuck in the bottleneck which is my shyness. Thanks for the comment.

    • SilverQ
      October 16, 2008
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      Whenever you comment...

      It is like a poem in-and-of itself. =)

      • myrataal silver member
        October 16, 2008
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        Poetry entices poetry ...

        and Love, Love ... And now your smile makes me smile ... Thank you.


  • MD Masroor
    October 16, 2008

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    A beautifully penned poem. I like your vivid imagery, and how it portrays such deep meaning. Just awesome. Keep it up! You are a great poet!


  • Learning2PaintYou
    October 16, 2008

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    This poem is very interesting. I like your wording here: "distant realms becharming blissful fates." And I like the imagery in your first stanza.


  • michellemybelle gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Beautifully written of a soulful love, brought by fate, destiny, something larger than us. Just lovely.
    blessings,
    Michelle


    • PerVirtuous
      October 17, 2008
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      Yes. Love is always larger than the people experiencing it. The goal is to expand yourselves until you can feel it all. Thank you.


  • Leonura
    October 16, 2008
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    This was really beautiful!The flow was great and the image! heartfelt and just wonderful!


  • waydownuponjoy
    October 16, 2008

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    Loved It !

    and you've shared this love, in poetical tribute, that was easy for me to identify with. I have felt this kind of sharing love often from this site and it's always a comfort to know that 'when doubts rise' just come and read some poems at AP and surrender to tranquility. Thanks for sharing this one. j y

  • Bob 42 silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    Excellent Sonnet

    Depending on where and when you do muse
    Your point in the least does become confused
    Seems that you`ve arrived at a decision
    Please share is it unite or division
    As the winds do shift all throughout our lives
    How can we be sure just where our love lies?


    • PerVirtuous
      October 16, 2008
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      From silent stillness of the mind
      A voice our truth of love imparts
      Just listen closely you will find
      Love whispers tenderly our hearts


  • BloodyThorn
    October 16, 2008
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    Beautifuly Writen A Great Piece


  • Wolfdog silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    Superb plus

    Ah, 'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    It's worth three bunnies, but - come on, Allan! - there is too much "art" about this, too much "form" (flawless of course), and not half enough passion. Take some risks, lad!


  • forgot2b3forgotten
    October 15, 2008
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    this is beautiful im so glad you have decided to share this spacific poem.. its amazing


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Just lovely, so much fantasy and color. A great love poem. (Glad to hear about Euros, the god -- rather than overseas currency!


  • Allie evans
    October 15, 2008

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    this poem is well written! i like your word choices too!
    i just read a poem that was slightly depression and this makes me feel better


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 15, 2008
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    This is beautiful!! You did a truly very lovely job!! This is incredible!! Well written!! Ilove it!


  • Syrenn
    October 12, 2008
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    This is beautiful!! I was totally immersed in the lovely scene you painted. You are very talented!

  • in2it
    October 12, 2008

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    It seems you have found your woman of the East. This poetry tells of things that were, things that are, and things that will be. You know the value of the gift you've been given and you have shared it beautifully with your faithful readers.


  • Nidaeah
    October 9, 2008

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    WOW!!

    Again, WOW!! I really enjoyed that. Very beautifully written. The imagery and feeling. I love how you incorporate the mythology! Well done. Thank you so much! Best of Luck!

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