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Assassinated

Mercury in the vial to rise
To the clinking of his Sais
Silent footsteps sear the floor
Sighs of movement through the door

Sweat percolates oil and greased skin
As the grim and grimy loll in libation
An eerie haze permeates like mescaline 
While an unnamed fear riles irritation

Naked eyes betray a nervous mind
Hard liquor corrodes sharpened reflex
Strings pulled and manipulated by design
By a sinister power both conniving and ubiquitous

But these eyes are not coated in wool
As he saunters up to my wood splintered bar
Do you play me for a buffoon, a mere fool?
Just who the hell do you think you are?

In slanted banter and raspy whispers
He stakes his claims and makes clear his demands
Of great exploit and plunder he slyly refers
And stealth mastery with unparallel sleight of hand

Bellowing belly laughs incite cringing spiteful eyes
How dare you! I’ll demonstrate my cunning and prowess
With a snap of fingers every warm body dismembers and dies
Leaving a bloodied and foul disemboweled mess

Without a flinch the bartender gives a glare from hell
Then without warning a fiendish grin and hearty laugh
You may be furtive, but you trifle with the wrong clientele 
With a slam of his shot glass the assassin splits in half

A gruff snort accompany by tobacco spit
I believe I’ve clearly made my point
Gathering the remains for the barbeque pit
After all these years, how do think I still run this joint? 

Author notes

Beware who really pulls the strings.

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  • Deathless1
    October 21, 2008
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    this is some smooth flowing stuff.
    nice one.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 18, 2008
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    Whoa!! That's some wicked write right there! Excellent!!

  • deaderbetter
    October 16, 2008
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    i really like this poem good job!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Whoohoo! Love this one! Hehe the imagery at the end is fantastic, I love how it builds up then wham. As always fantastic word play leading to awesome visuals! An excellent take on the prompt. Thanks for entering and good luck