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Wedding Day

We climb into our wedding bed,
wedding candles at the head,
candles already burning,
scented wax turning

as we turn,
ready to learn,
learn to love,
and love to burn.

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I tried for a wreath but lost the thread in places.

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  • ea silver member
    October 10, 2008

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    I like how this wreath takes a candle's scent and burns it at both ends, including the candle and the burning love of the wedding bed. Thanks for this!


  • thegoldenpen
    October 9, 2008

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    Beautifully written! Marriage is like one solitary candle kindled from two individual flames. The flames kindle One giant pillar candle, and this one solitary pillar burns eternally!


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Good

    This An excruciating and powerful piece of
    poetry I love the closing, you captured it very well, your talent shows. There were no errors. Or No typos. Nothing I Would change. I look forward to your next poem