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Colored Raindrops

Free flowing visions,

calmness of my mind;

opens new horizons,

dimensions yet to find.

 

I see warmth in the distance

visions of harmony,

we boldly go where no man has gone

on our journey to be free.

 

Free flowing visions

will carry humanity,

surpassing winding, bumpy roads

straight to unity.

 

Divine intervention

hand of God we'll see,

as he gathers all his children

from the branches of the tree.

 

I see hope in the distance

as we step outside the mind,

merging with the great I Am

where all souls are aligned.

 

Sprinkled colored raindrops

splashed in nothingness,

awakens sleeping children

to a life of love and bliss.

 

I see two winged angels

where only one exists,

perfection of humanity

submerged in divine mist.

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  • trekkergirl
    October 31, 2008

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    This is a nicely written poem. congrats on winning a trophy with this. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest. Good write.


  • lovesky
    October 29, 2008

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    WOW ! You touched my soul with your beautiful words , what a gift you have , thank you for sharing xxx


  • cbsbecm88
    October 20, 2008
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    this is a really good poem with lots of great imagery! good luck in the contest!


  • fluffatron69
    October 20, 2008
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    Damn good!

    I really liked this, and would not mind having written it at all! You convey the message beautifully in every verse, too! My fave verse has to be: -

    "I see warmth in the distance

    visions of harmony,

    we boldly go where no man has gone

    on our journey to be free."


  • who iam
    October 18, 2008
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    Enchanting & Divine

    Dear Friend,
    Your heart and soul are in tune with Him.
    This write is special to everyone that reads it.
    Favorite line:"I see hope in the distance
    as we step outside the mind,
    merging with ther great I Am
    where all souls are aligned"
    I will ask a favor of you via a personal message regarding this beautiful poem.
    Thank you for sharing .
    This definitely will be in my fovorites


  • AsIThink gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    Good Golly...!

    Pisces, I do believe this is now my favorite by you. So beautifully penned; loved the rhyming flow. I have to say that you really caught my attention with this. Such harmonious lyrical qualities all united with light-filling tranquility. This brought a smile to my face. You did so, so good with this write. This is (I think) my favorite part:

    "I see warmth in the distance

    visions of harmony,

    we boldly go where no man has gone

    on our journey to be free." ------------> Bravo!!!


    AsIThink...



  • darrylblacksr
    October 12, 2008

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    Without the truth we seem to think everything is fine until reality hits then we're lost in the mist of time
    outstanding write my friend to let us know that God is indeed the creator and controller of life itself...


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    Without visions we are not whole, we must have dreams to be able to move forward. It is the one who sees these visions so beautiful that is able to move mountains, ford raging rivers. Beautiful write!!'s


  • Scion
    October 10, 2008

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    "Over the Rainbow" was playing in my head as I read this (Eva Cassidy's version). very hopeful, very sincere this is. I likd the mixture of natural and spiritual imagery that you used in this- it gave the entirety of the poem a very pleasant, organic tone. Your purpose is "straight to unity" which I deeply was touched by and was very sure of your intent. Your flow was a bit off, but a little better than your PreWrite. And just be careful about overusing punctuation. (I know it's fun though). Overall, I am very pleased with this... at first I tought it was going to run on the cliche side, but your creativity was packed into every word and phrase. I think it turned out wonderfully. Cheers, Scion.

    Score:
    R-9 S-8.5
    T-8.8 U-8.7
    TH-8.8 G-8.5
    Ttl-52.3


  • Providence
    October 9, 2008
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    Lovely write. The rain and the prisms of light are truly a wonder!

    Nice read.

    Marianne


  • Selfexpressive
    October 9, 2008

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    A beautiful poem my friend... I love the "Divine intervention" as I strongly believe in this also... lovely write and very enjoyable to read, love,

    Selfexpressive xxx

  • goalsv
    October 9, 2008

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    Very poetic and positive, a beautiful poem with a very happy and joyful ending. The metephors set off the poem so well that it makes it calming to read.

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