Some people,
so hell bent on the notion
that we’re heaven sent
stand on street corners
and shout “Repent, repent!”
they preach and teach to
reach lost souls.
Ironically
I pray for divine intervention
to save me from
their unwanted attention,
how rude of them to intruded.
so what if I’m a sinner?
God will forgive me,
on the other hand
If I’m late for dinner
my girl friend will probably
tell me to go to hell.
Author notes
Quill Bil
A contest entry
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Comments
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I am offended! You are soooo going to hell!
No I am just kidding, I loved it. The people on the streetcorners, yelling at people walking by, thinking they are spreading god's word, may actually be schizophrenic. As one would have to be if he is hearing voices. So in a way, you have to feel bad for them, and maybe offer to refer them to a psychiatrist. They would certainly appreciate it.
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Well this is quite an interesting poem that you have written here... It definately gives the reader something to think about, and I like that in poetry.
thank you for entering the contest!
Leander -
I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the humor in this and the truth in it as well. It does get annoying when people preach to you when you don't want to hear it.
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very cute ending,
nice flow, enjoyable to read.
good luck in the contest.
Justgot2loveme
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lol Love the ending of this and truth be known. I am sure many are just as annoyed with these advocators
All my best to you in this contest
Oh and be careful not to be late for dinner!!!
Linda
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Ya do know I said write "oh my god, I got butter in my eye" in you author notes. I didn't mean try to put butter in your eye!
yep, that works, it is nicely written thanks for the poem. I am kinda shocked I didn't think anyone would enter for this one. but still thanks -
it was great =)
I can really empathise with this
just my girlfriend has a catholic family, so shes more "too bad if we both go to hell"
your poem is probally something alot of people need to hear, that fact that preachers are ignored with their narrowminded ideas
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WOw!!
You know i think i love this piece.
Had some great imagery to it and i loved the words you used.
And it made me smile
And i can't pick out a favorite part because i liked the whole thing every stanza.
Great write!
Thanks for entering and good luck in contest.
-Mandi
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