It must have been because of those glances,
a pair of eyes showing such desirable signs,
that he started to stumble down comically,
at the middle of the street, creating good audiences.
She smiled and he beamed,
a signal he thought that was for him,
so he stands up again and approached her,
creating verses in his mind, a love theme.
Oh! He forgot that he's just a commoner,
and she's a fair young lady, a novelty,
but this may be such a chance,
for another kind of that Cinderella story.
He kneels down in front of thine eyes,
expecting for a hand to be reaching out,
to savor the warmth of her hand into his,
and maybe, a conversation, endless he wanted it to be.
The heavens fall down as he was kicked,
with that wicked but angelic voice, he heard,
he was assumed as a robber, not the lover he thought he could be,
by that prejudiced young woman, he wouldn't dared again to see.
Oh! How he wished that he didn't take that chance,
for he might as well not felt mortified,
because maybe that's why some beauties may be perfect,
but most of the time transient...
Author notes
"Butterflies spread their ephemeral beauty thin as they strive to rejoice."
2. Treacherous tint and shy.
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Comments
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A sad story indeed. So many times we prejudge our fellow humans and when we do, we truly miss the priviledge of getting to know some very fine folks.
You have an occasional "tense" conflict in the poem. For instance, in line 7 it seem that it should read "so he stood up and approached her" since the rest of the poem is in past tense.
There was nothing so drastic as to deter from the overall message though. It is a message we should all consider when dealing with others that we are judging by their outsides.
Thanks so much for your entry. I enjoyed the read -
love the title
and how the story flowed with it
I love the smile it gave from the start
the ending is hurtful though, I feel for the guy
tsk tsk
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Nice response to the prompt. I love how you wrote about misinterpreted signals. It flows so well and is written so well. Great job
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