The Butcher Man is a bloody sight
On rotten corpse he longs to bite
The hatchet knife is nailed to his fist
For instant reaction when he gets pissed
Sword like teeth linger out his lips
His tongue sponges up anything that drips
To make him come
Say this twice
Make every slice concise
Make every slice concise
Author notes
I redid the poem ALOT to make it this good.
A contest entry
- Die of Fright by fatality-rhymed77.
600 points, ended October 23, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think this is a very good poem! I love how you wrote lines that are supposed to make him come! It's like bloody mary or something like that, you may think it's fake but you just can't help getting shivers when you say the lines, even to yourself! I hope you win, but then again...I entered, too! Don't worry you will probably beat me!
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This poem was VERY well done! I like your rhyme scheme and you gave me goosebumps a little. Very well done!
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