I know you think that I'm
Just overreacting
Our friendship is too strong for
Something serious
But if this other person
Was not in the picture
Then would my feelings still be
So mysterious?
You think that just because
We were never together
That I should close my eyes
Now and just walk away
If you could only see the love
I have inside me
I'd have you on your knees
Begging for me to stay
So don't you try to tell me
My heart is not breaking
Don't you try to tell me
That you're not the one
Don't tell me it's a game
That you are now ending
Cause I'm not gonna stop playing
Until I've won
Don't tell me it's too late
Because nobody owns you
Don't tell me I should stop and
Survive on my own
We both are well aware that
They do not love you
So don't ignore my heart and
Leave us both alone
Author notes
I actually wrote this off-site as a song and was interested to see if the lyrics held up without the melody, so I changed it into a poem for this contest.
A contest entry
- Make Me Feel Again.... by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended October 14, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A very emotional piece, one that shows a certain devotion for the love that could be had - if hearts could allow. I have been the friend from afar, simply wishing for a chance - and it is never a comfort to be simply discarded as 'just a friend'. This works well as a poem, nicely done. Thank you for your entry!
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This is quite melodic. I could see where you would move this to lyrics. Would love to hear the melody that goes along.
There is a desperateness in these words that aren't quite ready to see the ending of a relationship. Very real emotions expressed. ~Pamela
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Wow ! !
I think that you have penned an excellent poem/song here
Well done indeed. I enjoyed the read.
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I enjoyed this very much I would like to hearit with music, he lyrics are very strong good write lttlefishone
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I really liked this, I can relate to it so much. It was beautifully written and so full of emotion. I think that you did an amazing job with this, I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Take care
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Might I tell you that Kyleberg [link to him from my page] is running a contest at the moment for song prompts, open to prewrites, and i think this would fit in very well under the prompt from the Winner takes it All - Abba! It truly reminded me of this song
BRILLIANTY written, this is a surefire winner for sure!!
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woiw!
I really liked this write... I think that you have expressed your emotions well... and i can relate to over half of what was mentioned in this write... I have had my heart broken so many times by all these immature guys playing games with my heart... It really sucks but you learn from your mistakes and know what not to do in the future relationships... Keep up the great work!!
Shannon*Leah
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