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come and get me

i see you have come again
to try to take my soul
you failed once
why wont you fail again


you say my heart is a pure black substance that belongs to you
but why do i keep fighting you off
no ones stopping you
except me
but hey you are  a demon a monster a beast a creature
hey what am i


take me down
take me to the deepest pits of hell
where i belong
what have i done wrong


kill some people rapped some girls
cut out all their bodies and make a pretty design on my wall with their blood
nothing bad right


people say I'm insane
what do you think
your just as bad


its just so much fun
see their oozing blood and guts flow right out of that gashing wound
isn't it just beautiful


but hey do what you have to do
take me now!

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  • CarlosBernard
    November 10
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    I guess once you accept the inevitable there's nothing to fear, not even death.


  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    October 9
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    not bad
    but i think this could be a lot better if you broke it into stanzas and used spell check