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I am free
to live
to love
to wrong
to right

I am free
to bleed
to blame
to save
to die

I am free
to be
.

FREEDOM is my purpose.

Author notes

For Scion's contest

A contest entry

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  • KissMe123
    December 1, 2008

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    i love this poem, because they're very short lines but they are short lines with power my favorite lines are " i am free to be. FREEDOM is my purpose." they are full of such power i really just love them =]


  • Scion
    October 9, 2008

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    Hmm, a very, very interesting take on the prompt. I haven't seen, nor had I even thought of this one (and I promise I came prepared). Your brevity is appropriate though elaboration should never be feared, my friend. I like that little rhyme you flick in there like a dead cigarette. It made me smile, BRAVO. I hope your intent and your purpose and personal law of FREEDOM carry on past this poem (it did with me). Umm, one unsure thing for me? Why is that period sitting there all alone? I didn't know, but I felt bad for him.
    Cheers, Scion.

    Score:
    R-9
    T-8.7
    TH-8.8
    S-8.4
    U-8.7
    G-8.3
    Ttl-51.9